My opinion on campus love

There is much controversy about campus love. Some say campus love is a waste of time and money since after graduation, most couple break up and work in different places. However, others disagree because they believe there is true love in campus , which stands test and  overcomes difficulties.

As far as I am concerned, the latter opinion is more advisable. The follow reasons can support my opinion. Firstly, college students are grown-ups already, they have the right to pursue their lovers. Furthermore, true between the couple is precious and invaluable , which is the force to make them work harder. Besides, campus love is pure , that is to say, there are not many problems about money and status in the relationship.

Therefore, I can safely draw the conclusion that campus love is valuable. If we have campus lovers, then we must treasure and protect it. If we are still finding our lovers, then just wait patiently or pursue our love bravely.

我觉得你的body部分内容太少。就是firstly，secondly等列举这部分，应该每点都展开一些，就是至少要有两句话。要有点举例或说理论证，这样才丰富些。你的模式套得很好，但实质内容太少，很空洞。不会低分，但不会高分。
只是我的看法。说得不好不要介意。只是我考专四的时候，我们老师给我们分析过，也看过类似的专家观点。