Traffic in the city
Nowadays it is generally accepted that traffic is becoming more and more of a problem in modern city.Though the convenient traffic has brought a lot of advantages to our daily life ,undoubtedly, it also has some disadvantages which can’t be ignored.,such as pollution and traffic jams.

Various pollutions are produced by traffic, one of the most harmful pollutins is air polluton. Since we have to breathe fresh air to live on the earth , air pollution deprives our right to do so .what’s more, it does harm to our immune system, respiratory system and so on . Besides, traffic jams are another annoying and destructive phenomenon which lead to air pollution .Moreover, people’s precious time is wasted by it ,and people’s good mood is destroyed by it too.

So it’s high time that we took effective measures to eliminate these traffic problems . First and foremost , government should prefect roads so that the traffic would be smoother. In additon ,as customers ,we can devote our efforts by  using environmental friendly enengies to boom our provate cars ..Furthermore,  withour driving our private cars ,there are still a varitey of transportatons for us to chouuse , for example, undergrounds. All in all, solving these traffic problems needs everyone’s efforts .

没看纯顶！

一般般～

很中式的英语，很多用法很生硬~~~
举个例子：正文第六行改成，Since we need fresh air to survive on the earth~~等等~~
不过思路很好

那怎么改正呢？劳烦指教，想通过六级的上。

more and more of a problem

套套路的产品，谁看谁知道！

你的第一句好像永远一样啊

呵呵，套模板套得太明显了。